Saphira's bio {INACTIVE}

The Basics
Name: Saphira
Gender: Female
Age: 1 1/2 years
Place Of Birth: She does not know
Place Of Allegiance: None
Position: Loner

Appearance
Coat Color: White
Fur Length: Medium
Fur Markings and Scars: None
Eye Color: Dark blue
Physical Build: Small

Persona
History: She was born in a family. But they had separate packs. But it was forbidden. So her parents were stained,and her siblings and her were separated and taken to different packs. She found out they her parents were dead,so she ran away while she was still young. She hadn't known much about her parents. Since it was kept secret from her and her siblings. Ever since she has lived alone. And hates company. She had hardened her heart since then.
Personality: Saphira is a aggressive loner. Who prefers to be alone than to starve. She hates and fears love. And tries to shun any contact with any wolves. She usually just walks away. She is brave and will jump into any situation. She can be stubborn,and doesn't think she is wrong. But she is very smart,and knows what shes doing. She is a born leader behind that rough exterior,and can actually cooperative,but only on rare occasions.
Strengths: Smart,and a born leader,she is also fast. And has built up her muscles and is slowly growing stronger.
Weaknesses: She is stubborn and is only rarely cooperative.
Likes: Being alone,being right,and swimming
Dislikes: Love,other wolves,being wrong,and foxes. And bears.
Fears: Love

Relationships
Crush: Maybe :)we'll have to see
Mate: Nope
Pups: None
Friends: Will be updated
Foes: About everyone
Family: Unknown

Whatever else you want:

So.. is Saphira just going to be a loner, wandering around The West Lands? Because she doesn't seem like the type to join one of the packs
I see she has a pup, which is unrealistic, because wolves reach sexual maturity at 2 years, and Saphira is 1 1/2, unless Nada is an adopted pup or something?
"She was born in a family. But they had separate packs. But it was forbidden." What was forbidden? Love? Like Romeo and Juliet? I'm confused...

Sorry if this comment seems a little harsh... I'm just confused....

I think Owlwing meant Nada as in none, that, and I kinda agree with you, it is a tad bit confusing... I think that even though Fen'Harel would prefer to be a loner, she still joined a pack because of the benefits.... sorry, I'll shush now...

Oh so sorry I'll edit that then. Sorry Bajj
And yeah forbidden love like Romeo and Juliet. It was like a law. Sorry if thats confusing. I kinda wanted a role-play story behind it hehe

It's a little bit unrealistic, but then again if you take a look at the history behind the pack... I think we can let that one slide.
1. Regarding her being 1 1/2 years, the time we're at in RP would make it so her age would have to be a whole number, if that makes sense.
2. I'm a little bit iffy on you having another character without having established your current character in a pack... (iffy on long-term loner characters in general)
3. Sentence fragments. Your bio is full of sentence fragments, which makes it a little hard to read. I think I've noticed grammatical errors in some of your other posts too, so you might want to check your posts over next time^^
Not trying to offend you here, just offering some criticism, trying to be constructive.

Ok I'll have her join a pack instead then. Being curious. And then I'll make her 2 as well.
And I'll try and study language i guess. :/

She sounds pretty though! ^^

But, yes, I agree with the others, it was a little challenging to read.
Beyond that though, I think it was a very good idea, her past I mean. All the forbidden stuff is very interesting. cx